tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6449157588123340698.post2792076799317113017..comments2023-09-27T04:30:22.621-04:00Comments on Finding Those Dulcet Tones: International Medical Outreach- My new Passion?honeylunahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10528514781592213251noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6449157588123340698.post-53564698252072154732008-09-16T21:37:00.000-04:002008-09-16T21:37:00.000-04:00I want to test some testes. Ha ha. Jessie, this pr...I want to test some testes. Ha ha. Jessie, this program sounds so good for you. Aren't applications awful? Don't you just want to say, "Just take me, I am the best" and have them know this to be true? If you need any personal reference essays keep me in mind, talking about how great you are is one of my favorite things to do. Love and kisses.Mayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16719394416574590978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6449157588123340698.post-74488225519237582482008-09-11T11:31:00.000-04:002008-09-11T11:31:00.000-04:00Glad to help! After all, this is what I do.Glad to help! After all, this is what I do.That Hankhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05514310999129694443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6449157588123340698.post-82243914016607507282008-09-10T14:17:00.000-04:002008-09-10T14:17:00.000-04:00Brother, you are a saver! Thank you for being so s...Brother, you are a saver! Thank you for being so smart and for writing all those suggestions out. Most of those sentences that weren't working for you, weren't working for me either. So huge thanks for all those alternatives. <BR/>Thanks Mama for saying that my essays are beautiful. That means a lot coming from you, even though I know I can't always trust your judgment because you are my mom. <BR/><BR/>hehe...testes...hehe.honeylunahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10528514781592213251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6449157588123340698.post-27798851900751112952008-09-10T08:54:00.000-04:002008-09-10T08:54:00.000-04:00You know I gotta do this:- tight knit, not tight n...You know I gotta do this:<BR/>- tight knit, not tight nit (that makes me think of drunken lice)<BR/>- I don't like the phrase "during my high school career"" and I'm not even sure why. I would say "while in high school" and save myself a word.<BR/>- "So, to cope with the huge community difference, I applied" (you have to set that phrase off with commas)<BR/>Other than that little nit-picky crap, it's well written and really shows your personality.<BR/><BR/>2:<BR/>- a part of, not apart of <BR/>- You can ignore this if you want, but I would rewrite this sentence:<BR/>"Every ounce of my being wants to go to a place that is unlike the U.S.A., (which is fortunate in so many ways), to work hard, get a hands-on-experience, and share whatever it is that I have with people who really need medical help."<BR/>as:<BR/>"Every ounce of my being wants to go places different from those I have known to work hard, get hands-on experience, and share what I have with people who really need medical help."<BR/>(especially the "whatever I have part" - sounds like you don't know what you have to offer)<BR/>- don't use "schooling" twice so closely together<BR/>- "take a exam which only testes" hee hee - tests, not testes (aw, nuts)<BR/>- this one's awkward:<BR/>"I want to be apart of a team of students and doctors who just wants to make a difference and who is actually doing it!"<BR/>maybe: "I want to be part of a team of students and doctors who actually work to make a difference."<BR/><BR/>Other than that, girlio, you know you can write. They'd be fools not to take you.That Hankhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05514310999129694443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6449157588123340698.post-57716093255807044642008-09-10T08:04:00.000-04:002008-09-10T08:04:00.000-04:00Those are beautiful essays! I have a few spelling/...Those are beautiful essays! I have a few spelling/grammar suggestions but basically- those should do the job.Ms. Moonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09776404747858099919noreply@blogger.com